2007-2009高考英语满分作文及名师评析
【2007重庆卷】
『试题回放』
据报道,7岁的美国女孩Amy Bruce得知自己身患肺癌(lung cancer)后处于极度的痛苦之中,美国抗癌协会(ACS)决定,每当Amy收到一封慰问信,就给她增加3美分的治疗款。
假如你是新华中学的学生李华,请你用英文给Amy写一封慰问信,主要内容包括:
-自我介绍
-得知的情况
-表示鼓励
-打算为她做什么
-祝她早日康复
注意:
1.信的格式已为你写好
2.信中不得出现你的真实情况。
3.词数100左右。
4.请在答题卡上作答。
『考生作文』
Dear Amy,
I’m Li Hua from Xinhua Middle School of China.I’m sorry to hear that you got the lung cancer which brought you great pain.But you should realize that you are young and have a promising great future.So,stand up and fight against the disease! I’m sure you will win.It is reported that the America anti-cancer association will donate three cents upon every comfort letter you receive.So I will tell your situation to all my friends and ask them to write to you.In that way,you will get enough money for you to be cured.Hope you can be well soon.
Yours,
Li Hua
『名师点评』
本文依照要求,涵盖了所有要点。文章使用了高中常见的句式,如I?m sorry to hear that…,It is reported that…等,都比较好。作者对定语从句的使用恰到好处地修饰了文章,行文自然而通顺,值得学习。
『积累卡片』
好词
1.realize v.意识到
2.promise v.允诺
3.donate v.捐赠
好句
1.I’m sorry to hear that you got the lung cancer which brings you great pain.
我很遗憾地得知你身患肺癌,给你带来了巨大的痛苦。
好处:
1.which引导限制性定语从句。
2.So,stand up and fight against the disease!
因此,坚强地与疾病做斗争吧!
好处:掷地有声,语言准确。
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